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Blue dawn. After one last stretch, I start alone up Kennesaw Mountain.

dappled light
the sparrow's song
in pieces

Most Sundays, I would be joined by mom and, if we can budge him, my kid brother. Today they have opted for church. I don't mind the solitude. Walking alone, I focus on breathing, slow and deep into the stomach. In martial arts, this is called Qi Gong. The old masters would breathe this way to increase their longevity.

summer
on the young girl's lips
dandelion seeds

Passing a field, I'm surrounded by butterflies. Swallowtails, Hairstreaks, even a Southern Dogface! I've never seen so many at once. Among the insects, hikers scour bushes for ripening blackberries. According to the guidepost, this is where General Sherman suffered his heaviest casualties.

memorial park
the cannon packed
with moss
This is an example of the Japanese poetic style known as Haibun. Haibun is a linked form which combines haiku or tanka with narrative prose. Last year, I conducted a journal series on the art. It can be seen in my previous journal entries. :heart:
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8ankH Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2011
catching up with your work is a blessing
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Laurence55 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2011
Thanks Tristan, it means alot to hear that.
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zenatz19 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2010
It's been a while since I read a haibun, so I just went back and reread your haibun journal entries... I like how the prose kind of goes from internal to external observation, respectively. And it is so amazing how connected yet distinct the prose and the haiku are! By themselves, they are each profound pieces of writing, but together, they support and nourish each other in a way that intensifies the images and heightens the depth of your experience. By the way, all three haiku are unfathomably lovely and brilliant, but I am so in love with that second haiku-- what a striking, exquisite image that is.
Reading your poetry really makes me want to draw :blushes: Especially after reading this particular haibun.
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Laurence55 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2010
Thank you Natalie :heart: I'm really glad that you've gotten into reading more about haibun! This piece was a joy to write and I'm happy that came through here. Your reading is just beautiful. I especially like that you see the internal and external aspects of haibun writing. Haibun teaches writers to take the linkage of haiku to the next level. I don't write them often, but I'm hoping to get another done soon. I may do tanka prose or even Senbun (senryu prose).
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zenatz19 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2010
The first time I'd read a haibun of yours was also the first time I'd read any haibun-- I remember being so fascinated with its structure and how startlingly well the prose and haiku went together. I really can't wait to read whatever you end up writing. :heart:
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Laurence55 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2010
Thanks Natalie :heart: Yeah, haibun (and classical haiga) are amazing things. I have no drawing skill, so haiga is closed to me unless I collaborate with someone. The linkage concepts between the two are the same though.
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zenatz19 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2010
Someday I'll learn the painting style of haiga, so we can collaborate... =p :date:
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Laurence55 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2010
:smooch: Yes, you must!:date: That would be so fun!
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zenatz19 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010
:iconinluvplz:Definitely...:heart:
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Laurence55 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010
:smooch:
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