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the first note of spring
        frog jazz
©2007-2009 `Laurence55
:iconlaurence55:

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Vacation in Savannah :)

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:iconabcat:
The final line break is odd. I'm thinking surely the middle line should go the first note of spring to leave frog jazz on its own.

:shrug:
It is still a lovely picture. :~)
:iconlaurence55:
Actually, you're right. I had intended the original ending line to describe the actual voice of the spring frog, but I think this two line haiku woks better. What do you think?
:iconabcat:
I've forgotten what the first line was now, but this version works brilliantly. Great edit. :~)
:iconchild-of-exiles:
Brillant and brief, I love it.
:iconlaurence55:
Thanks, I appreciate that :)
:iconkildgeek:
:) That's a great haiku. Brilliant play with the words.
:iconlaurence55:
Thanks, I appreciate that :D

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