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1.

leaving the elevator
her perfume
exits first


2.

another fight ending
with your absence
I spread
clover honey
on both sides of the toast


3.

more oil news...
I take my coffee
jet black


4.

deep summer
the fading tune
of ice cream


5.

hard rain
on the bedside radio
Kind of Blue


6.

tilling
the summer garden
into softness
the frown
on grandma's face


7.

squad cars
at the house next door
evening heat


8.

storm passing
my brother stomps
a puddle


9.

back to school
the doctor advises
more shots


10.

up to my ears
in monthly bills
I steal
another moment
for this tanka


11.

end of summer
a new cocoon
in the attic


12.

card declined...
she pretends not to need
the milk


13.

first school day
everyone learns
the cliques


14.

English major
with perfect pronunciation
his sneeze


15.

evening news
amid horrors
of foreign war
a heron gliding
into sunset


(complete)
This will be a series of Senryu, Haiku, Tanka, and Kyoka, not necessarily in that order :heart:

3. I actually hate coffee :heart:

5. Kind of Blue, my favorite album by Miles Davis.

In this poem I'm tinkering with the idea of the floating line being placed anywhere in the poem with the same effect. :heart:
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:icon8ankh:
have you heard the Miles tune Ghetto Walk? I have it on the Complete Silent Way Sessions, but I don't know if it was released on another album. I don't have it on any other of his albums--and I do have many.

Wondered--

hmm my favourite for now is Big Fun.

thank you for the poems
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:iconlaurence55:
I have heard that one! It may be on a best hits album, but I'm not completely sure. Lately I've been listening to more Dave Brubeck. Thanks again for reading and supporting my work.
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:icon8ankh:
there's a good live one of Brubeck from, I think, Carnegie Hall. One tune in 11/4 time as I remember. Yeah! [link]
that's it! gotta listen to that one again! woohoo
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:iconesin:
Thank you for this.
:heart:
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:iconlaurence55:
Thank you Esin :heart:
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Phoneix-Faerie Aug 9, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
great ending, a fantastic series!
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:iconlaurence55:
Thanks for always being so supportive!
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:iconphoneix-faerie:
Phoneix-Faerie Aug 10, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome
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rlkirkland Aug 9, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
A fitting closure, the images of unwinable wars glide past our consciousness as the heron at times.
Nice series Laurence. :heart:
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:iconlaurence55:
Thanks Ron :heart: Yeah, its interesting how in spite of humanity's drama, the natural world continues on unfettered...until we disturb it through our ignorance.
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