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heat wave
the beggar receives
another coat


my brother adds wings
to the chalk dragon


apple harvest
all six hands
of the hornet


mountain pass coyote eyes in xenon


welcoming friends
wraps the sky


summer dusk...
a photo of grandpa


warm wind
the sleeping toddler


deep rain...
her sundress dips
into curves


noon heat-
         bandannas sprout
from the cornfield


another man's shape
in the darkness


a week of clouds-
my sister paints her nails
sky blue


show over
the magician makes lunch
This will be a 12 day series of haiku and senryu poetry :heart: As I discussed in my previous journal on Renga, the concepts of ushin and mushin comprise the overall philosophy of the art. These concepts are reflected in haiku and senryu respectively.

4. xenon headlights
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zenatz19 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2009
10. Very compelling and mysterious. I love how distance isn't clearly leaves the story of the poem up to each reader's interpretation. There's a certain intensity in what is not said...

11. Beautiful and peaceful...optimism and hope in the face of oppression as defined by a person's actions. I also love how there's sort of an ironic connection between clouds and both cover up something, but one is oppressive and the other is liberating.

12. Magical! :D I really am in awe of how many layers of meaning you always incorporate in such few lines. A very enjoyable image...

Laurence55 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2009
Hey Natalie! I'm really glad you enjoyed these :smooch: I especially love the way you've juxtaposed the freedom of painting vs. the oppressive nature of cloud cover. That is an aspect I had not considered. Your readings are just excellent and always get more in depth! Yeah, in the 10th piece, I was seeking to create a sense of space and shadow. I'm glad it worked :heart: I hope you've been well
zenatz19 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2009
:hug: I always feel very comfortable telling you exactly what comes to my mind when I read your writing! :giggle: :heart: I've been well and quite busy! How about you, Laurence? How's college and work going?
Laurence55 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2009
Everything has been busy on my end too :heart: I am one month from college graduation :wow: I've been studying and working alot, both for my job and school. Also, I had to get my car transmission replaced last week...:faint: almost 3,000 dollars...
zenatz19 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2009
I remember--July 31st, right?! :faint: You're such a hard worker...:glomp:
3000 dollars...ouch!! :faint: Oh and how's your kung fu and Iaijutsu going, Laurence? It's been a while since we last talked about it...:heart:
Laurence55 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2009
Thanks Natalie :heart: Yeah, the bill was huge, but I'm glad the work is finally done. Martial arts is going well. I'm on a new teaching schedule, so I am just getting adjusted to that. Also, I'm working on a few things in my own practice; mostly drills and concept stuff. This week though, I've had to get alot done for school, so i haven't been doing as much. I'll really be back into it next week. :hug: Has it been really hot around your way? Its been over 100 degrees here every day! :sun:
zenatz19 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2009
By teaching schedule, do you mean classes that you're teaching? :hug: Glad to hear that martial arts is going well! And YES, it's been really hot over here in Chicago as well! It's been in the 90s this past week, and it's just starting to cool down a little. But definitely not as hot as it is in Georgia! :giggle:
Laurence55 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2009
Yeah, i mean the martial arts classes that i teach :hug: Yeah, its been sweltering here, but it rained today so that cooled it down some. I've been spending some time studying haiku today and getting ready for the haiku-thon coming up. I like revisiting concepts every now and then. I find that they change as I mature in the art :heart: I hope your day has been going well Natalie :heart:
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dead-now Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
The first is so brilliant. It's the perfect example of necessary optimism held by the subject.

These have a cool environment to them.
Laurence55 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009
Thank you! I appreciate you saying that!
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