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end of summer
the deflated wheel
of a tricycle

(L)


first day of spring
the prostitute forces a smile

(D)


mountain rain
the laughter
of grandchildren

(L)


no moon tonight
the cleaners plan a strike

(D)


autumn returns
wild geese
in the same letter

(L)


after the stroke
she calls me 'Michael'

(D)


coming solstice
my mother checks
for lumps

(L)


earthquake over
the spider rebuilds its web

(D)


childhood photo
a father
I don't recognize

(L)


another year older
the morepork's song

(D)


first star
the infant's grip
tightens

(L)


construction site
sparrows play

(D)


sleeve weather
a raven slips
into clouds

(L)


last week of tutorials
the roof springs a leak

(D)


Indian summer
the beggar tries
my door

(L)


collapsed mine
the pub falls silent

(D)


Thanksgiving dinner
we mute the program
on Indians

(L)


sniffing her panties
summer heat

(D)


no name
in the thrift store coat
first snow

(L)


sudden downpour
the hills disappear

(D)


crackdown
on Atlanta homeless
December wind

(L)


first Christmas alone
the snow so deep

(D)


the youngest
pregnant again...
winter solstice

(L)
This will be a renku played between me and Dick Whyte ~SOLARTS. The main purpose of this renku is to play and test ideas we've been working on for our upcoming book on haiku theory.

We will be writing the renku in the comments section and then I will update this deviation regularly to include the new entries. :heart:

We are in different seasons in our respective areas.

Our earlier renku can be seen here...[link]
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
this is a wonderful collection. there is such a mix of emotions in here, with some very pathos pieces (the stroke haiku particularly touched a heartstring for me), and ideas of freshness, hope and joy coming through beautifully too. wonderful work from both of you :heart:
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Laurence55 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011
Thank you! We appreciate the kind words :heart: This set reflects our respective techniques and approaches to haiku. We are in the middle of exploring new concepts and ideas. Thanks for taking the time to read!
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hw-campbell-jnr Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010
I call these 'Springsteen Haiku'.

That's a compliment.
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Laurence55 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011
Thanks Robyn! :D
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almcdermid Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I look forward to seeing your book.
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Laurence55 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
Thank you
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almcdermid Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
sure thing
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SOLARTS Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2010
first Christmas alone
the snow so deep
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almcdermid Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
This is good.
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SOLARTS Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011
Thanks man! Much appreciated.
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