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All Deviations

April Tanka Series 1 by *Laurence55:iconLaurence55:



30.

dancing
muse
I hum a love song
for her, slightly
off key


29.

a sadness
slowly drifting
from me-
sweetbay blossoms
in the mayan blue sky


28.

talking myself
into missing her-
the dead aunt
who never
spoke to me


27.

stormy noon
at her Shakespeare recital-
I follow
her voice
beyond the words


26.

World Tai Chi Day
in the city park-
everyone
racing home
after class


25.

the restless cry
of a rain crow-
against my better judgment
I tell her
what I really think


24.

spring moonrise
I shift into
the bed space
of my night-mused
lover


23.

a moth
held fast
to the mantis bosom-
his stepwife cradles
the youngest child


22.

lifting the shirt
high above your head-
cherry blossoms
deeper pink
at sunset


21.

in my haste
tipping
the mango juice-
sunset pours
into dusk


20.

cabbage rose-
the tint
of her lipstick
on my favorite
mug


19.

the hollow slap
of a bullfrog's
dive-
she spells out for him
that its over


18.

lost
in my thoughts
on a moonlit path-
this doubt
I've come to expect


17.

letting down
her guard hand
for a moment,
senpai confides in me
April loneliness


16.

forgetting
Buddha's teaching
of the middle path...
I put blood, corpuscle, soul
into evening love


15.

3 a.m.
on a starless night-
I listen
for Janis Joplin
in cricket song


14.

not one comment
on the poem
I was so sure about-
this evening too
the mousing cat goes hungry


13.

"remain calm"
the manual says
easy for them-
black bear prints
in morning earth


12.

no pets allowed
in the old bookstore
yet, each spring
another
dust bunny


11.

an orchid
rising from last year's winter-
the shudder
of her orgasm
once more


10.

spring graveyard
the grass
thicker now
between
my grandparents


9.

catching them
in the act-
periwinkles opening
to the incoming
tide


8.

not a single blackbelt
to your name
still
the lip lock I submit to
every time


7.

struggling to hold
his toughest pose
the young gang member
asking me
about tanka


6.

her rain-beaten hair
in the evening cool-
a shard of moon lingers
just a little while
longer


5.

trying
to upstage
Son House
this sapsucker
in the distant pine


4.

stopping to watch
a pelican take flight-
at what point
did I become
my father?


3.

April
and the meadow
so thick
I almost slip
away


2.

as if
we needed
a reason
to embrace-
sudden wind


1.

the glass-eyed stare
of a spring peeper-
six months now
and still I'm in awe
of new love
©2008 *Laurence55
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This will be a daily updated submission as I do a tanka a day for the month of April, along with :iconjade-pandora: I will also post corresponding journals with historical, technical, and just fun information coinciding with the style! :D enjoy!


1. Spring peeper-nickname for tree frogs indigenous to Georgia

5. Son House-famous blues musician from Mississippi

Sapsucker- woodpecker species

15. Janis Joplin- famous blues/rock artist

17. senpai- martial arts mentor, and in my case a close friend

25. Rain Crow- species of cuckoo native to the southern regions. It derives its nickname from calling just before a storm.
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~KatieWings:iconKatieWings: Apr 6, 2008, 9:09:10 AM
I told this to Jade about her tanka--I did a few others, too--but not to impress, perse.

What I mean is...I had my first date with a very extraordinary gentleman, and I haven't dated in quiet a while...he was such a calm, collected man--but very shy.

We walked in utter, terrible silence to the boardwalk, looking out into Humboldt bay, and I told him, "Tyler, is it okay if I say something?"

and he said, "sure."

so to break the ice, I quoted, by heart, two of jade's tanka and your #3 & #2.

I said them slow and cautiously, wanting them to sink in, to make an impact on him as they did me.

He asked me, "Those were amazingly beautiful. Are they your own?"

and I laughed and said simply, "They are from my 'teachers', Jade Pandora and a lovely man name Laurence. They inspire me."

He replied back..."I am glad you shared them with me, thank you." and I could tell he was very moved.

I hope you do not mind...I didn't mean to infringe upon anything...but he asked me for you two's DA sites. He can't comment, but be happy in knowing that at this moment, he is looking over your gallery with the fluttering wings of his heart! Thank you for such inspiration, Laurence!

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What's that coming over the hill, is it a monster?
*Laurence55:iconLaurence55: Apr 6, 2008, 12:13:19 PM
Amazing! Thank you Katie! That means so much to me (and Jade as well I know) to have m work be instrumental in forming a new bond of romantic love (or even friendship). That to me is the highest purpose of both haiku and (especially) tanka. This man is very lucky to have someone who is kind-hearted and sensitive to the tunes of art. I am honored that you referenced myself and Jade. We are both working very hard to bring a total sense of awareness to the manner in which haiku and tanka are presented on DA. Thank you for always being such a pure hearted friend. That is such a rarity these days. :hug:
~KatieWings:iconKatieWings: Apr 6, 2008, 4:03:06 PM
Well, Tyler was very impressed by both Jade and your ideas; he doesn't know much about poetry, so I was explaining to him what I had read from your and Jade's journals, what I understood of the ideals and a bit of the format. He was very interested in how someone could say so much with only so many words--a true work of art, in itself.

I am always humbled by how many people seem to be impressed by me; I surround myself with people, who in my eyes, are "Real" people: genuine, lovely, artistic people, who care about more than one topic and think "romantically..." I see people who are happy in their own contentment, and people who make the world their own just by being in it--people who believe, faithfully and without knowing---as people who live to the fullest!

It really is not you who should be so thankful to me, but I, to Jade and you! You never cease to amaze me with your generosity and open-heartedness; you two are also so pure and beautiful...so thank YOU! :hug:! Me? I'm just being myself and giving love to those who need and deserve it.

Off topic a bit here....I was telling Tyler (my date) about a book I once read..of beautifully written poetry that was quite erotic, but in a kind of sensual way that it wasn't crude of vulgar...the title being "My Beloved". (Or maybe "This is My Beloved"??? Not sure, to be honest.)

I recommended that we read the book together, because it starts out with new, fresh love and looks back on the love after it had ended, and shows us how we should love to prevent it from happening. But then I could not remember the poet's last name. Walter....? Do you happen to know? "My Beloved" ("This is My Beloved" maybe??) by Walter ---------? You don't need to answer right away, and if you don't know, just tell me; that's fine, too :). I'm sure I could find out at a used bookstore, perhaps--it is an older book.

Looking forward to blossoming into spring with you, my friend!

Bless!

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What's that coming over the hill, is it a monster?
*Laurence55:iconLaurence55: Apr 6, 2008, 5:17:15 PM
Katie, you are truly a wise one my friend :nod: Let me think...I have heard of the book. it is by a man named Walter Benton. it should be available at Amazon. :D
~KatieWings:iconKatieWings: Apr 6, 2008, 5:27:13 PM
aww, shucks...:blushes: Just doin' what feels right, Laurence :heart:

Oh and, thank you! I am so glad you knew of the book! I was not aware it was still in print. You just made my day, my friend!

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What's that coming over the hill, is it a monster?
*Laurence55:iconLaurence55: Apr 6, 2008, 5:28:57 PM
Excellent! Thats what I'm here for :D
~8ankH:icon8ankH: Apr 6, 2008, 10:25:27 PM
watching you and your work is one of my better choices this year
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browse me/know me
=Keraness:iconKeraness: Apr 7, 2008, 8:27:19 PM
I love each one of these tanka for different reasons. Your style seems to change to suit the mood and tone of each poem, which is very cool and unique. Number four is my favourite; it's very philosophical while staying true to the simplicity of good tanka.

I have a suggestion: In number six, I think that 'rain beaten' should be 'rain-beaten'.

I give you props for tackling a month of tanka after a month of haiku, especially since Mike's starting up the haikuwrimo again next month!

Great job. :thumbsup:

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"Fight the good fight of the faith. Take hold of the eternal life to which you were called."
1 Timothy 6:12
*Laurence55:iconLaurence55: Apr 7, 2008, 9:12:20 PM
Thanks Kera! Yes, I like the dash between rain-beaten. I can add that. Congratulations on being published! you deserve it! I am proud of you :D :heart: